Nice ideas, but repetitive wording @Panax
Hello! I hope you understand that my opinion is intended to be constructive and not to belittle this work!
At first I was interested in the story, but sometimes the narration becomes repetitive, with the main character talking about the same topic several times or thinking of his actions as a game but in a stupid way. Interaction with some characters is strangely twisted, with meaningless wrong conclusions.
I'm still on chapter 68 and I hope it gets better as my initial reading motivation is getting weaker.
With a more elaborate narration, I'm sure this story will motivate me to continue read… 続きを読む