Re:Sentences

Changed Points : Second Iteration

2023/11/21　Line 1 of the first paragraph

For Sariel, the meadow around the house was just a small part of everyday life.

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From Sariel's perspective, the meadow around the house was nothing more than a symbol representing boredom.

2023/11/21　Lines 2-3 of the first paragraph

Due to the influence of her father, Sariel had long been aware that beyond the meadow, there was a forest, and beyond that, a town.

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Due to her passion for hunting, Sariel had known for many years that beyond the grasslands, there was a forest, and further beyond that, there was a town.

2023/11/21　Lines 4-5 of the first paragraph

However, Sariel was unaware of what lay beyond that, and even when asked, her father refused to reveal it.

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However, Sariel remained unaware of what lay beyond the town, and even her father wore an expression suggesting he, too, did not know.

2023/11/22　Lines 5-7 of the first paragraph

It could be the vegetation covering the land, or perhaps the rumored expanse of the sea, or even the unknown... but Sariel had no clue.

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It might be a village where wizards dwell or perhaps the rumored cave of giant tribes, but in the current situation, Sariel had no hints, not to mention any clues, to explore it.

2023/11/22　Lines 7-8 of the first paragraph

Sariel's expectations soared within her chest.

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Sariel felt excited.

2023/11/22　Lines 8-9 of the first paragraph

I thought about quietly reading a book inside the house, but I couldn't suppress my feelings at all.

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I attempted to forget those feelings by sweating while doing a thorough cleaning, but it had absolutely no effect.

2023/11/22　Lines 9-10 of the first paragraph

Sariel burst out of the house with vigor and descended gently through the meadow.

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After quietly locking the house, Sariel decided to head towards the forest with a brisk pace.

2023/11/22　Lines 10-11 of the first paragraph

With every stride, the jingling sound of metal echoed from the pocket.

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With each step forward, the sound of metal clashing emanated from the shoulder bag.

2023/11/22　Lines 11-12 of the first paragraph

Sariel was convinced that it was the sound of the house key.

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Sariel knew it was the sound of metal coming from a pouch adorned with numerous stainless steel keyholders.

2023/11/22　Lines 12-13 of the first paragraph

The edge of the meadow came into view, and as it did, the sky suddenly began to darken.

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As the meadow area neared its end, and the sun began to set, looking up at the sky revealed a flock of birds returning to the forest.

2023/11/22　Lines 14-15 of the first paragraph

And when the forest began to come into view in the distance, the intense light, reflecting off the earth, had faded away.

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And as the forest began to come into view in the distance, faint howls of beasts reached her ears.

2023/11/24　Line 17 of the second paragraph

Sariel pondered what lay beyond the town, thoughts swirling in her mind.

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Sariel imagined what lay beyond the town, and it surely was something freshly unreal.

2023/11/24　Line 18 of the second paragraph

Such contemplation spurred the weary Sariel into action.

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The rich imagination provided vitality to the weary Sariel.

2023/11/25　Lines 18-19 of the second paragraph

With each attempt to extend her fatigued legs forward, Sariel's pocket indicated the presence of the key.

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Every time Sariel felt the muscles' protest, she gritted her teeth and endured it.

2023/11/25　Lines 19-20 of the second paragraph

Sariel resolved to confirm with her own eyes.

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Sariel determined to ascertain the truth, resolved to go to the scene herself and confirm it with her own eyes.

2023/11/25　Lines 21-22 of the second paragraph

At the edge of the meadow, a forest emerged, and the warm air transformed into a cold breeze.

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The grassland transformed into a forest, and a pleasant breeze, now carrying a chill, swept over Sariel.

2023/12/5　Line 22 of the second paragraph

When passing through the forest, it might already be dawn.

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If Sariel were to pass through the forest, she would likely lose a significant amount of time.

2023/12/6　Lines 23-24 of the second paragraph

For Sariel, the time it took to travel was not as important as personally confirming what lay beyond the town.

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Sariel didn't mind it; rather, she even thought that there might be something of value awaiting her.

2023/12/6　Lines 24-25 of the second paragraph

Sariel traced forward along the narrow artificial path her father had created.

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Therefore, Sariel walked leisurely along the artificially crafted path, presumably made by someone, heading towards the town without any hurry.

2023/12/7　Line 28 of the third paragraph

However, the forest seemed reluctant to reveal the town that should be beyond it.

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However, the forest stubbornly refused to show anything other than the same forest, no matter how much time passed.

2023/12/7　Lines 29-30 of the third paragraph

And so, following a narrow artificial path, but inexplicably, it abruptly ended along the way, leaving Sariel lost.

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And so, the artificial path inexplicably turned into a beast trail, causing some unease for Sariel.

2023/12/7　Lines 30-31 of the third paragraph

The haphazardly grown vegetation obstructed the view, and Sariel had to admit that he had lost his way on the path.

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Eventually, the path was obstructed by massive rock faces, steep slopes, and tangled weeds, causing Sariel to give up on moving forward and turn back for the time being.

2023/12/7　Lines 32-34 of the third paragraph

Sariel returned to the location where the artificial path abruptly ended and, navigating around it, became aware of the dangers of the night road.

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While Sariel was detouring and searching for a safe route, she came across fresh tracks of a beast.

2023/12/7　Lines 33-35 of the third paragraph

Sariel gave up on being active during the time when beasts might appear and chose to sleep to rest her weary body.

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Feeling both danger and drowsiness simultaneously, Sariel lay down in a somewhat open space, a little away from the footprints.

2023/12/7　Lines 37-38 of the fourth paragraph

In the morning, awakened by the shrill cries of birds overhead, Sariel rubbed her eyes and, covering her ears, set out towards the place beyond the town.

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After a while, feeling discomfort from insects crawling on her body, Sariel woke up, brushed off the bugs, and then began moving through the forest.

2023/12/8　Lines 38-40 of the forth paragraph

As Sariel exited the forest and entered the town, the silence dissipated, replaced by a bustling energy that seemed to envelop the entire space.

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As Sariel emerged from the forest and passed through the gate that marked the entrance to the town, the distant calls of wildlife faded away, replaced by the bustling chatter of people.

2023/12/8　Lines 40-41 of the fourth paragraph

Sariel realized that the expanse beyond the town was also something familiar.

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As Sariel walked through the town for an extended period, growing weary of the repetitive scenery, she couldn't help but acknowledge that beyond the town, a fantastical world did not unfold.

2023/12/8　Lines 43-44 of the fourth paragraph

In the vast space, many people utilized it as an indescribable and impersonal place as a part of their daily lives.

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Beyond the town, all there was to be found was a mundane, uninspiring reality.

2023/12/9　Lines 45-46 of the fourth paragraph

Having learned what lay beyond the town and feeling no excitement, Sariel was greatly disappointed.

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Overwhelmed by the extreme dullness, Sariel regretted her own actions and felt as if her knees might buckle beneath her.