Re:Sentences

Changed Points : First Iteration

2023/11/13　First line of the first paragraph

For Sariel, the meadow surrounding the house was just a small part of the world.

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For Sariel, the meadow around the house was just a small part of everyday life.

2023/11/13　Lines 1-2 of the first paragraph

Sariel knew that beyond the meadow, there was a forest, and beyond that, a town.

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Due to the influence of her father, Sariel had long been aware that beyond the meadow, there was a forest, and beyond that, a town.

2023/11/13　Lines 3-4 of the first paragraph

However, Sariel was unaware of what lay beyond that.

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However, Sariel was unaware of what lay beyond that, and even when asked, her father refused to reveal it.

2023/11/14　Lines 4-5 of the first paragraph

Was it another meadow, a forest, or perhaps the town itself？

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It could be the vegetation covering the land, or perhaps the rumored expanse of the sea, or even the unknown... but Sariel had no clue.

2023/11/14　Lines 6 of the first paragraph

Sariel became curious.

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Sariel's expectations soared within her chest.

2023/11/14　Lines 6-7 of the first paragraph

Even when trying to stay still inside the house, both feet and heart were reluctant to comply.

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I thought about quietly reading a book inside the house, but I couldn't suppress my feelings at all.

2023/11/14　Line 7 of the first paragraph

Eventually, Sariel burst out of the house and raced through the meadow.

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Sariel burst out of the house with vigor and descended gently through the meadow.

2023/11/14　Line 9 of the first paragraph

With every step, the sound of metal clashing resonated from the pocket.

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With every stride, the jingling sound of metal echoed from the pocket.

2023/11/15　Line 10 of the first paragraph

Sariel thought it was the sound of coins.

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Sariel was convinced that it was the sound of the house key.

2023/11/15　Lines 10-11 of the first paragraph

As the edge of the meadow came into view, the ground suddenly took on the hues of sunset.

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The edge of the meadow came into view, and as it did, the sky suddenly began to darken.

2023/11/15　Lines 11-12 of the first paragraph

Just as the forest became visible, the earth was bathed in the colors of twilight.

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And when the forest began to come into view in the distance, the intense light, reflecting off the earth, had faded away.

2023/11/16　Lines 15-16 of the second paragraph

Sariel wondered if beyond the town, the forest might continue, or if there would be another meadow.

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Sariel pondered what lay beyond the town, thoughts swirling in her mind.

2023/11/16　Line 16 of the second paragraph

The thought intrigued Sariel.

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Such contemplation spurred the weary Sariel into action.

2023/11/16　Line 16 of the second paragraph

With each step on the grass-covered ground, Sariel's pockets jingled with the metallic sound of coins.

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With each attempt to extend her fatigued legs forward, Sariel's pocket indicated the presence of the key.

2023/11/16　Lines 17-18 of the second paragraph

Sariel was determined to find out.

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Sariel resolved to confirm with her own eyes.

2023/11/17　Lines 19-20 of the second paragraph

As the forest at the edge of the meadow appeared, the land transformed into the evening's warm embrace.

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At the edge of the meadow, a forest emerged, and the warm air transformed into a cold breeze.

2023/11/17　Lines 19-20 of the second paragraph

Passing through the forest, night might fall, or perhaps it would turn into morning.

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When passing through the forest, it might already be dawn.

2023/11/17　Lines 20-21 of the second paragraph

Sariel didn't mind. In the pursuit of discovering what lay beyond the town, Sariel was prepared for such uncertainties.

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For Sariel, the time it took to travel was not as important as personally confirming what lay beyond the town.

2023/11/18　Lines 21-22 of the second paragraph

Guided by the markers left within the forest, Sariel continued forward, step by step.

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Sariel traced forward along the narrow artificial path her father had created.

2023/11/18　Line 24 of the third paragraph

However, the forest didn't seem to reveal what lay beyond it.

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However, the forest seemed reluctant to reveal the town that should be beyond it.

2023/11/18　Lines 25-26 of the third paragraph

Even though there should be a town after the forest, Sariel felt lost, retracing the same paths multiple times.

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And so, following a narrow artificial path, but inexplicably, it abruptly ended along the way, leaving Sariel lost.

2023/11/19　Lines 25-26 of the third paragraph

The darkness of the night made it difficult to see, and Sariel admitted to being lost.

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The haphazardly grown vegetation obstructed the view, and Sariel had to admit that he had lost his way on the path.

2023/11/19　Lines 27-29 of the third paragraph

Returning to the last confirmed location of the markers, Sariel rested, realizing there was no need to navigate in the dark night.

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Sariel returned to the location where the artificial path abruptly ended and, navigating around it, became aware of the dangers of the night road.

2023/11/19　Lines 29-30 of the third paragraph

Sariel concluded that there was no need to move in the dark and slept until the morning sun rose.

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Sariel gave up on being active during the time when beasts might appear and chose to sleep to rest her weary body.

2023/11/19　Lines 32-33 of the fourth paragraph

In the morning, with sunlight filtering through the trees, Sariel, rubbing her eyes and stretching, set out towards the place beyond the town.

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In the morning, awakened by the shrill cries of birds overhead, Sariel rubbed her eyes and, covering her ears, set out towards the place beyond the town.

2023/11/20　Lines 33-35 of the fourth paragraph

As Sariel walked through the forest, eventually emerging into the town, the longer the distance from the forest, the more bustling with people it became.

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As Sariel exited the forest and entered the town, the silence dissipated, replaced by a bustling energy that seemed to envelop the entire space.

2023/11/20　Lines 35-36 of the fourth paragraph

The place beyond the town was, indeed, another town.

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Sariel realized that the expanse beyond the town was also something familiar.

2023/11/20　Lines 36-37 of the fourth paragraph

A seamless blend of numerous towns, each adjacent to the other, where many people lived and worked across the vast land.

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In the vast space, many people utilized it as an indescribable and impersonal place as a part of their daily lives.

2023/11/20　Lines 37-39 of the fourth paragraph

Realizing the true nature of what lay beyond the town, Sariel felt a mix of surprise and a tinge of regret.

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Having learned what lay beyond the town and feeling no excitement, Sariel was greatly disappointed.