大変遅ればせながら読了しました！
官能的な描写も去ることながら大人な心理描写もとてもリアリティがありじっくり噛み締めながら読ませていただきました。
最後の最後にタイトル回収はお見事……！
むしろここから益々面白くなるのでは!?　と思ったところなので名残惜しいくらいです。

二次創作の方も大変評判ですがオリジナルの新作も楽しみにしています！

My expression when I see the last setence --> (´･д･)?
This story plot is very very impactful, both sisters.

Its a massive flip from the serious mood to a hilarious ending www

It has been fun. I was worried that this would take too long because of how serious the original story was.

As to improve the series, perhaps add depth to the character of Erina and a flashback on how Hatsuna decided to try immorality as a form of escape. The story has so much going for it.

いとこのまま、恋人で......ね？は初奈の台詞だったのか(-_-;)続編はどうでしょうね💦全員両想いの歪んだ三角関係ですが、本人達が幸せなら別に良いんじゃないでしょうか？

I guess its refreshing that Im not reading oyakodon for a change www.

I do wonder if this series will have a sequel? The fun part of the story is just about to begin I feel.

まさかの姉妹エンドだと！？

I can't wait for the ending though I feel the series will be open-ended and will need a sequel. The story has felt too serious to be a love comedy.

As much as I want Erina to end up with Taku, she is not making that much impact. I don't want her to be rejected because I do admire her persistence. I will settle with the open-ended ending or at least a promise between her and Taku.

As for Hatsuna, her actions show that it is not romance she wants but an escape from her situation. I do hope Taku sees his situation in a better light.

I am sure you will manage Sento-sensei.

恵理那は自分の恋は報われないなと諦めてるけど、正直主人公がどっちを選ぶか最新話でも分からないよ……。個人的には、あまり恵理那を負けヒロインにして欲しくないかな💦

まあ、自分としては恵理那が良いかな…。初奈は今の夫がアレなだけで、状況が好転すれば主人公が居なくても問題無いような気がします🤔個人的には、そんなに弱い女性とは思えません😅

勇人君 is a criminal... I don't know why he did this, but he seems to be a good boy, so he must have some reasons...
Besides, I always believe that 初奈 has seen the pocky game, maybe it's just my illusion...

I wonder if Erina will discover Hatsuna's secret and do a similar thing. Perhaps Im reading too much eromanga w.

恵理那と結ばれて欲しい

Will Souichiro prove that a man of today can really be a woman of tomorrow? wwwww. I will not judge.

Anyway, if you are doing netori then I think I can see a way to make the story lighter.

I will just have to wait and see as I enjoy this twist in Hatsuna. I really thought of her as an antagonist when the story started.

I wonder how these intense revelations can make the mood any lighter, this is supposed to be a romantic comedy after all. Perhaps I was thinking too serious in the past chapters www.

I am now confused on things but perhaps this is another shocker in the series. I will just wait and see.

I was just thinking, perhaps Erina can indirectly ask Hatsuna on what to do about her(Erina) feelings for a romantic interest. Just so Hatsuna would be an older sister figure for Erina and actually have more participation in the story other than being a nuisance to the feelings of Taku www.

Also, a summer festival is perfect for Erina's physical appearance to be described. A natural look fits the innocent narrative.

I think a character should actually teach confidence to Taku. Its the only way for him to have a bit of confidence in himself. Though I am intrigued on how he will be able to forget Hatsuna or even doubt his feelings for her. Unrequited love plagues both the main characters which is interesting.

That confidence is really needed. Even if Taku accepts this early, it may fall flat because he lacks the determination to show to the world that he is proud and happy in choosing Erina. Please have it that way. A scenario having Taku being first rejected upfront by Hatsuna before choosing Erina gives a bad impression towards Taku's character >.<

こ、こんなの続きが読みたいに決まってるんじゃァァないかッ！？（訳:初めましてよろしくです）

Now that the world of this story is shook, perhaps Erina can have a few chapters as the narrator. Also, I dont recall a chapter physically describing Erina overall but only Hatsuna.

I think a description of Erina will be needed to further the idea of her growth. She has made her position clear last episode. As such, it feels more dramatic that she is ready to grow and convince Taku her determination for a romantic love one way or another.

I am glad how the story progresses though Im not gonna lie, the last episode shocked me and Im still feeling its aftermath in here www.

The bombshell you gave just blew the story wide open. As such, there is no need to widen the world for the main story. Though you can still expand the world to make the story worthwhile from a different perspective.

I like how this chapter just shakes everyone in the story.

I used to think that 恵理那's "lover training" is just a way to approach 拓, I never thought she really has a secret crush. So this training really means something...
And the last words, after that is the surakjang!?

This episode now opens that Hayato may be another supporting character for the growth of Erina. Considering that Hayato also has a liberal view in things, it is possible.

I can't give a review at the moment sorry. There is not yet that much interactions of the supporting characters with the main cast www.

I will continue reading and reviewing the episodes though ;)

Currently, Erina feels too childish and carefree. I do wonder if Taku being troubled with his feeling for Hatsuna will urge Erina to grow.

As for Taku, its clear that his growth as a character is him having confidence www.

Its always good when characters in a story grow and change. Even better if they end up together eventually.

Its good that supporting characters are entered in the story to give more content to the character of Erina. The majority of the story so far is told only from Taku's perspective. I wonder what Erina's motives are for her actions and a deeper reason as to why she resorted to such.

This appears to be a chance for Taku to show at least his confidence. Though I dont really know if this series is intended to have a classic happy ending so I'm not betting that Taku will be open to any form of romantic feelings at the moment. I will just have to wait and see.

The old store, vending machine, tatami, the chirping of cicada, and the immoral relationship with sisters, this story reminds me of the Yosuga no Sora. I like this atmosphere.

So 拓 is now having a yabai relationship with his little sister, and now the elder sister is married and then the NTR event... Please give me a moment to calm down... (But I like JK, JK is god, I'm serious)

キモキモのキモ、生理的に無理を見て、恵理那ちゃん容赦ない〜とくすっとしましたが、確かに宗一郎さんは嫌な感じですね。
拓にぃはもやっとしただろうに、大人の対応でした。

You have to continue the story. There is still not enough things to show why Taku is still conflicted over the past and why he has no confidence in himself whatsoever which can be proven by the lack of his driving license for example w.

As to how big the world of the story will be, I cant make a guess at the moment. It will all depend on the issues of the characters and their interactions.

In this chapter there is a good mix of the atmosphere that it is Erina and Taku together against the plot of this world and some hesitations on the part Taku in relation to Hatsuna and her husband. Though I do hope you include something along the way of why each characters ended up with their corresponding partners. Perhaps its also a good way to include more details to the conflicts of each main character.

This is a good start of breaking down the dilemmas of every main character concerned in the story. I hope you make an interesting twist on this unrequited first love.

遂にせんと先生の新作が！！
お待ちしておりました。
今後がとても楽しみですね(^^)/

Despite this being a romcom, I do think there should be some unresolved issues within every main character. For example, a reason why they do the pretend lovers act. The issues and conflicts does not need to be in ep 1 immediately, its just some points to consider to make readers stick to the story.