★ Good!
Nice ideas, but repetitive wording @Panax
Hello! I hope you understand that my opinion is intended to be constructive and not to belittle this work!
At first I was interested in the story, but sometimes the narration becomes repetitive, with the main character talking about the same topic several times or thinking of his actions as a game but in a stupid way. Interaction with some characters is strangely twisted, with meaningless wrong conclusions.
I'm still on chapter 68 and I hope it gets better as my initial reading motivation is getting weaker.
With a more elaborate narration, I'm sure this story will motivate me to continue reading.
Good luck!
(used google translator, my review might be spelled weirdly)
こんにちは!私の意見は建設的なものであり、この作品を軽視するものではないことをご理解いただければ幸いです。
最初はストーリーに興味がありましたが、時々ナレーションが繰り返しになり、主人公が同じトピックについて何度も話したり、自分の行動をゲームのよ…
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